Tuesday, 26 March 2013

#TantalizingTuesdays Reckoning

Is it really Tuesday again? I had this picture for a while, and the right words just wouldn't come to me until now. To be precise I wrote this Sunday night on the M6 coming back from a fantastic weekend in Scotland.

Anyways - Enjoy!



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"I'm sorry, I should have told you."

The whispered words settled in his gut like lead, and made him feel like a complete heel. Still, coming face to face with her past like this, had thrown him for six.

"Yes, you should have done." He ground the words out through gritted teeth, and flexed the smarting knuckles of his right hand. The rush of adrenalin and the grim satisfaction of seeing her ex-client go down like a sack of potatoes had been worth the pain, and the undoubted loss of his job.

"No, one talks to you like that—no one."

She pulled him closer, wrapping her stocking clad legs around his hips, and he took a deep calming breath of the unique scent that was all her. Loosening the death grip he had on his whisky laced coffee, he banished the look of disappointment on his father's face from his mind.

His mother's words echoed around his brain.

"She's scum. I told you this would happen."

He could see his parents glaring at them now, through the open door to the kitchen.

Raising his cup in a mock salute, he smiled.

"The past doesn't matter. Let's go home, baby."






Tantalizing Tuesday Authors use a photo prompt to tease in 200 words. Please click on the graphic to check out the other fabulous participating authors.


Let me know what you thought of my teaser today.


Till next week, folks.


D x

20 comments:

  1. Brilliant! Although I'm now imagining a truly sordid past for her...

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  2. What a tease! Well done as always, Doris. Bravo!

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  3. Oh l love a noble man who'll do anything for his love! Great post!

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  4. I want to know about the past.It must have been a colourful one owing to the fact he decked her ex client. An excellent teaser. Well written and full of emotion, leaving me hanging on for more

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    1. I believe it was... Thanks, Naomi :-)

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  5. Loved the teaser! Made me want more.

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  6. I love a mystery! Great job! What was her past? Hope you'll write more of it!

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  7. Whoa! Talk about standing up for your girl.

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  8. Beautiful, compelling teaser. What did her parents dislike or loathe about her? I'm glad he chose to take her home rather than subjecting her to more scorn from his parents.

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  9. A great story, cunningly unravelled. Tease in the best sense of the word - so much included in those 200 words.

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