Zeb crunched the damn card up in his hand, and
wished he could swipe the entire surface of that table onto the floor. It would
give him some small satisfaction to see all the finery smashed to pieces. It
was a fucking shame he hadn't been able to smash Brian's face in.
How fucking dare that scum bag do this to Giselle?
Zeb had never liked the other man. He'd told himself it was just his jealous
feelings clouding his opinion of the far too slick Brian. After all, the
blasted man had got to Giselle, before Zeb had managed to pluck up the courage
to tell his best friend that he loved her.
The hesitant
click clack of her heels behind him told him that Giselle had finally emerged
out of the ladies. She'd retreated in there after finding her asshole fiancé
fucking her best friend at their wedding rehearsal dinner.
"You're still here?" she
asked.
Zeb turned around and smiled at her.
"Where else would I be, treacle?"
Her beautiful eyes filled with fresh tears, and he
opened his arms, grateful beyond belief when she flung herself into them and
snuggled close.
"I've been such a fool, Zeb."
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As ever, let me know what you thought of my teaser today.
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:-) But it can't be that straightforward, can it?
ReplyDeleteOf course not. There's reasons he hasn't told her ;-) weg
DeleteI got really hooked her to the tease Doris. I love reading about some kind of drama. Very good!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ray :-)
DeleteLoved the snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Angie, blasted story keeps niggling at me now, lol
DeleteVery nice tease, Doris. I loved the way you used tension to keep this alive.
ReplyDeleteThank you :-)
DeleteUnrequited love, competition, jealousy, betrayal, shame, humility, love and that was all in the first paragraph. Typical Doris. In on the mark and a quick artful exit and by design. I loved it. xo
ReplyDeleteThanks, Muffy :-)
DeleteThs is an excellent example a story compacted with a great amount of different emotions.The reader certainly hopes she falls for Zeb. Brian's characterization is one of being a shit. I love how you you created a story with all the emotions within in so few words.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Pablo :-)
DeleteGreat teaser. I could sense the anger and tension build up within him plus the realization that he should move on. Love it
ReplyDeleteThanks, Naomi :-)
DeleteI'm not fond of how this ends. I love the anger and passion filling the first three quarters and kind of wish we had stayed with Zeb instead of giving the last line to her. Still, a powerful and moving piece full of emotion.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Angelica, there's lots more angst to come for those two :-)
DeleteBeautifully written, yet painfully sad, tease. I hope she sees sense and realizes Zeb is the man for her
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